Several new jutsus [seeking pre-training approval]

As the title says, I'm doing some unusual things here so I'd like to get a reaction before I write up the R&D. If anything is unclear/too far out, please tell me!

Name: Hatsuen - Release Smoke
Rank: E
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: Wind
Description: This is a simple technique that produces a small cloud of dust and debris. The cloud is impenetrable (barring dojutsu or similar) to vision for about five seconds and is completely gone in seven seconds.

Name: Renzu no Jutsu – Lens Technique
Rank: D
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: Wind
Description: Using a negligible amount of precisely controlled wind chakra, a shinobi forms a light-bending disk of air that provides adjustable magnification of near or distant objects. The disk is supported by a steady stream of energy from the shinobi's encircling hands. The technique could theoretically be performed using a tool that could precisely conduct chakra to produce a larger disk.


Name: Doton: Megurushi – Earth Style: Mark
Rank: D
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: Earth
Description: The shinobi using this technique creates a small “landmark” underground directly beneath their feet (up to one meter below the surface). When they are within three meters of this structure they are aware of its location. The landmark lasts for about five hours. If a shinobi is in the “Area of effect” of several of their landmarks at the same time, they sense the number of landmarks but not their location. If the earth in which the landmark exists is disturbed, it is destroyed.
Megurushi is most commonly used for navigating in a dark area such as a cave (or while blinded), moving through unfamiliar areas, etc.


Name: Fuuton: Megurushi – Wind Style: Mark
Rank: D
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: Wind
Description: This technique creates a sort of tethered chakra projectile, or a small group of them. Each repetition of the jutsu produces an invisible sphere about the size of a person's head, maybe a little larger, and anything with a chakra network moving in that sphere releases the limited-range (150 meter) projectile to move back and alert the technique's user, amounting to what is essentially an invisible tripwire. A vague estimate of the chakra network's size is obtained, but this does little more than allow the user to tell the difference between a man and a rabbit. The sensation is enough to wake the user from sleep.


Name: Ishikiri - Stonecarving
Rank: D
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: Earth
Description: This technique allows fine manipulation of earth and rock. It gets its name from the fact that the technique is frequently applied to produce incredibly lifelike statues or other memorials. It was originally developed as part of an attempt to simulate the effects water chakra has on earth techniques. The technique uses an uncreased concentration of chakra to simulate the effects of fluid; while extremely effective in allowing precise and rapid control the technique was simply not efficient in any area larger than a sphere with a 2ft diameter.

Link: For all above-- https://ultimateshinobi.rpg-board.net/training-area-f28/training-topic-2-t2095.htm#23556

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Name: Renzu no Jutsu – Lens Technique
Rank: D
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: Wind
Description: Using a negligible amount of precisely controlled wind chakra, a shinobi forms a light-bending disk of air that provides adjustable magnification of near or distant objects.

How large is this light-bending disk and how long does it say in the air for? with a technique like this you would have to continuously pump wind-chakra to sustain it in the air, please say this.

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Name: Doton: Megurushi – Earth Style: Mark
Rank: D
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: Earth
Description: The shinobi using this technique creates a small “landmark” underground directly beneath their feet (up to one meter below the surface). When they are within three meters of this structure they are aware of its location. The landmark lasts for about five hours. If a shinobi is in the “Area of effect” of several of their landmarks at the same time, they sense the number of landmarks but not their location. If the earth in which the landmark exists is disturbed, it is destroyed.

This is just really a question, but you havent really stated what you want to use these for really, what is their purpose?

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Name: Fuuton: Megurushi – Wind Style: Mark
Rank: D
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: Wind
Description: This technique creates what is essentially an invisible tripwire (albeit more a small sphere than a line)—the first time something living moves into the affected area, the ninja that placed the mark detects it, assuming they are within 150 meters of the mark at the time. A vague estimate of its size is obtained which does little more than allow the user to tell the difference between a man and a rabbit. The sensation is enough to wake the user from sleep.

How do you create this invisible trip wire? you need to state this like "A thin line of wind chakra, or a hollow pocket of air." How long can this wind trip wire be? and it would also need a steady flow of chakra.

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Name: Ishikiri - Stonecarving
Rank: D
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: Earth
Description: This technique allows fine manipulation of earth and rock. It gets its name from the fact that the technique is frequently applied to produce incredibly lifelike statues or other memorials.

You havent explained how the techniqu actually works, just why it has it's name. How large a earth substance can it manipulate? how fast? who does it actually work?

Renzu -- Edited.

Doton: Megurushi-- They could be used for a variety of things-- navigating in a dark area such as a cave (or while blinded), moving through unfamiliar areas, etc.

Fuuton: Megurushi-- I envision it as a sort of tethered chakra projectile, or a small group of them. That would not require maintenance. Each repetition fo the jutsu would produce a sphere about the size of a person's head, maybe a little larger, and anything with a chakra network moving in that sphere would release the limited-range (150 meter) projectile to move back and alert the user.

Ishikiri-- Edited.

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Doton: Megurushi-- They could be used for a variety of things-- navigating in a dark area such as a cave (or while blinded), moving through unfamiliar areas, etc.

Fuuton: Megurushi-- I envision it as a sort of tethered chakra projectile, or a small group of them. That would not require maintenance. Each repetition fo the jutsu would produce a sphere about the size of a person's head, maybe a little larger, and anything with a chakra network moving in that sphere would release the limited-range (150 meter) projectile to move back and alert the user.

Ok nice, just add this into your jutsu's to give them a more accurate description and then you are free to train them, good luck ^^

Edited and trained -- https://ultimateshinobi.rpg-board.net/training-area-f28/training-topic-2-t2095.htm#23556.

When you add them onto my profile, would you please remove the spoiler tags from the Jutsu section in the second post? I can't copy-paste from inside them.

All good will do. Approved! ^^